All the flowers shall bow to Blackflower
And all shall become the night
I’m swimming
There’s no shore
a thousand undercurrents
a thousand scythes
a thousand axes biting veins
under Blackmoon
And chromatic petals shall fall to the ground
And Blackflower reigns
There’s no shore
If walls have no shape
I’m drowning
Blackflower ate the sky and earth
And shattered all the gods
I’m sucked into the wake
Into the sea’s luminescence
The walls have no shape
There is no wall at all
Eyes gaze upon Blackflower
And shall never know the dawns
(revised 3/19)
1 comment:
This poem reminds me of a lot of things, most of which I can't place. I like the layout very much. I remember you had the original title as the first line, which I liked better because it really made me want to read it. At the same time, "Collapse" works well after finishing the poem. I'm not so good with titles anyway.
The second stanza reminds me a bit of the lines in "You and Me and Rainbows" where he says "stabbing skewers at the sheep..." that whole section for some reason. And also you like axes! What's the symbolism there for you? It's an interesting choice.
I don't really have any constructive criticism this poem is awesome, I wish I had wrote it. I like the two separate parts, I'm working on a story that uses a similar idea. This is my favorite poem from you, and i've read them all.
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